Common English Mistakes in Transfer Essays by Arabic Speakers

This page focuses on errors typically made by native Arabic speakers from United Arab Emirates when writing a Transfer Essay in English.

Mistake Example #1

Misuse of articles ('I have car' instead of 'I have a car')

I am writing to express my interest in transferring to your university. I have astrong passion for computer science andI believe that your program will provide me with anopportunity to excel. InAt my current university, I have completed courses in programming and data analysis, and I am eager to continue mystudies iny more advanced topics.

Text corrected by:
Jennifer, Detroit, Michigan USA

"I just added a few articles and polished up the text. Well done!"

I am writing to express my interest in transferring to your university. I have a strong passion for computer science and I believe that your program will provide me with an opportunity to excel. At my current university, I have completed courses in programming and data analysis, and I am eager to study more advanced topics.

I am writing to express my interest in transferring to your university. I have strong passion for computer science and believe that your program will provide me with opportunity to excel. In my current university, I have completed courses in programming and data analysis, and I am eager to continue my studies in more advanced topics.

Mistake Example #2

Overuse of passive voice

As a student from the United Arab Emirates, it isI believed by me that transferring to youresteemed university will greatly enhance my academic journey. The opportunities provided by your institution are highly valued, and it isI hoped by me that my skills wioulld be further developed in such a nurturing environment. TI made the decision to transferwas made after careful consideration of the programs offered, which are seen asperfectly aligned with my career goals.

Text corrected by:
Michele A., Boston, Massachusetts; United States

"I changed some of the phrases from the passive voice to the active voice. Otherwise, the ideas in this text are clearly expressed."

As a student from the United Arab Emirates, I believe that transferring to your university will greatly enhance my academic journey. The opportunities provided by your institution are highly valued, and I hope that my skills would be further developed in such a nurturing environment. I made the decision to transfer after careful consideration of the programs offered, which are perfectly aligned with my career goals.

As a student from the United Arab Emirates, it is believed by me that transferring to your esteemed university will greatly enhance my academic journey. The opportunities provided by your institution are highly valued, and it is hoped by me that my skills will be further developed in such a nurturing environment. The decision to transfer was made after careful consideration of the programs offered, which are seen as perfectly aligned with my career goals.