Common English Mistakes in Investor Pitches by Arabic Speakers

This page focuses on errors typically made by native Arabic speakers from Saudi Arabia when writing a Investor Pitch in English.

Mistake Example #1

Overuse of formal expressions ('I am honored to inform you...')

DearEsteemed Investors,I amwould honorliked to inform you about our groundbreaking project that is destined to revolutionize the renewable energy sector. ItThiswith great privilege that I present to you an opportunitythat is not only lucrative, but it also aligns with the noble cause of sustainability. I am deeply humbled toinviteing you to join us in this venture, which I am confident will yield significant returns and bring immense pride to all involved.

Text corrected by:
Jennifer, Detroit, Michigan USA

"I changed the tone a little so it's less formal (but still professional). Well done!"

Dear Investors, I would like to inform you about our groundbreaking project that is destined to revolutionize the renewable energy sector. This opportunity is not only lucrative, but it also aligns with the noble cause of sustainability. I am inviting you to join us in this venture, which I am confident will yield significant returns and bring immense pride to all involved.

Dear Esteemed Investors, I am honored to inform you about our groundbreaking project that is destined to revolutionize the renewable energy sector. It is with great privilege that I present to you an opportunity that is not only lucrative but also aligns with the noble cause of sustainability. I am deeply humbled to invite you to join us in this venture, which I am confident will yield significant returns and bring immense pride to all involved.

Mistake Example #2

Misuse of verb tense (e.g., 'He go to school' instead of 'He goes to school')

Ladies and gentlemen, today I present to you our innovative solution that willrevolutionize the energy sector. Our company isdeveloping a technology that reduces energy consumption by 30%, and we havealready seen significant interest from major industry players. We believe that with your investment, wecan achieve our goal of expanding to international markets by next year.

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Vince, United States

"Just a few minor tweaks to verb forms :) Nice job! "

Ladies and gentlemen, today I present to you our innovative solution that will revolutionize the energy sector. Our company is developing a technology that reduces energy consumption by 30%, and we have already seen significant interest from major industry players. We believe that with your investment we can achieve our goal of expanding to international markets by next year.

Ladies and gentlemen, today I present to you our innovative solution that revolutionize the energy sector. Our company develop a technology that reduce energy consumption by 30%, and we already see significant interest from major industry players. We believe that with your investment, we achieve our goal of expanding to international markets by next year.

Mistake Example #3

Confusion between masculine and feminine pronouns

Ladies and gentlemen, today I am excited to present to you our innovative solution that will revolutionize the way businesses manage their resources. Our team has worked tirelessly to develop this platform, and hwe isare confident that it will meet all your needs. We believe that our product will not only save time but also increase efficiency, andshe will be a valuable asset to your company. TWe thank you for considering our proposal, andwe look forward to partnering with you.

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Vince, United States

"Overall your writing was very professional; it just needed a few tweaks to make things consistent. Good job! "

Ladies and gentlemen, today I am excited to present to you our innovative solution that will revolutionize the way businesses manage their resources. Our team has worked tirelessly to develop this platform, and we are confident that it will meet all your needs. We believe that our product will not only save time but also increase efficiency and be a valuable asset to your company. We thank you for considering our proposal and look forward to partnering with you.

Ladies and gentlemen, today I am excited to present to you our innovative solution that will revolutionize the way businesses manage their resources. Our team has worked tirelessly to develop this platform, and he is confident that it will meet all your needs. We believe that our product will not only save time but also increase efficiency, and she will be a valuable asset to your company. Thank you for considering our proposal, and we look forward to partnering with you.