Common English Mistakes in Script Treatments by Arabic Speakers

This page focuses on errors typically made by native Arabic speakers from Saudi Arabia when writing a Script Treatment in English.

Mistake Example #1

Confusion between masculine and feminine pronouns

In the bustling city of Riyadh, a young woman named Layla dreams of becoming a renowned filmmaker. She has always admired hiser father's storytelling skills, and she hopes to follow in his footsteps. One day, Layla receives an unexpected opportunity when her friend Ahmed tells her about a film competition. He encourages her to submit her script, believing in her talent more than she does herself.

Text corrected by:
Vince, United States

"Almost perfect :)"

In the bustling city of Riyadh, a young woman named Layla dreams of becoming a renowned filmmaker. She has always admired her father's storytelling skills, and she hopes to follow in his footsteps. One day, Layla receives an unexpected opportunity when her friend Ahmed tells her about a film competition. He encourages her to submit her script, believing in her talent more than she does herself.

In the bustling city of Riyadh, a young woman named Layla dreams of becoming a renowned filmmaker. She has always admired his father's storytelling skills, and she hopes to follow in his footsteps. One day, Layla receives an unexpected opportunity when her friend Ahmed tells her about a film competition. He encourages her to submit her script, believing in her talent more than she does herself.

Mistake Example #2

Overuse of formal expressions ('I am honored to inform you...')

In the grand tapestry of our narrative,I am honored to inform you that the protagonist, a humble merchant from the bustling streets of Riyadh, embarks on a journey of profound discovery. It is with great pleasure that I convey to you tThe intricate details of his quest, which isare destined to unravel the mysteries of an ancient desert legend. As the story unfolds, I sham delighted tol share thatow the merchant's path is fraught with challenges that will test his courage and wisdom, ultimately leading him to a revelation that will change his life forever.

Text corrected by:
Jennifer, Detroit, Michigan USA

"Good work! I took out some overly formal words that disrupted the flow of your narrative."

In the grand tapestry of our narrative, the protagonist, a humble merchant from the bustling streets of Riyadh, embarks on a journey of profound discovery. The intricate details of his quest are destined to unravel the mysteries of an ancient desert legend. As the story unfolds, I shall share how the merchant's path is fraught with challenges that will test his courage and wisdom, ultimately leading him to a revelation that will change his life forever.

In the grand tapestry of our narrative, I am honored to inform you that the protagonist, a humble merchant from the bustling streets of Riyadh, embarks on a journey of profound discovery. It is with great pleasure that I convey to you the intricate details of his quest, which is destined to unravel the mysteries of an ancient desert legend. As the story unfolds, I am delighted to share that the merchant's path is fraught with challenges that will test his courage and wisdom, ultimately leading him to a revelation that will change his life forever.

Mistake Example #3

Misuse of verb tense (e.g., 'He go to school' instead of 'He goes to school')

In the bustling streets of Riyadh, a young man named Khalid dreams tof becomeing a famous filmmaker. He works tirelessly on his script, hoping it will capture the attention of producers. One day, he receives a call from a renowned director who wants to meet him. Khalid's heart races with excitement as he prepares for the meeting, knowing this could be his big break.

Text corrected by:
Vince, United States

"Great job! Very few changes were needed to ensure your script is error-free. "

In the bustling streets of Riyadh, a young man named Khalid dreams of becoming a famous filmmaker. He works tirelessly on his script, hoping it will capture the attention of producers. One day, he receives a call from a renowned director who wants to meet him. Khalid's heart races with excitement as he prepares for the meeting, knowing this could be his big break.

In the bustling streets of Riyadh, a young man named Khalid dream to become a famous filmmaker. He work tirelessly on his script, hoping it will capture the attention of producers. One day, he receive a call from a renowned director who want to meet him. Khalid's heart race with excitement as he prepare for the meeting, knowing this could be his big break.