Common English Mistakes in Investor Pitches by Cantonese Speakers

This page focuses on errors typically made by native Cantonese speakers from Hong Kong when writing a Investor Pitch in English.

Mistake Example #1

Overuse of direct translations from Cantonese

Honorable Investors, today I want to introduce you toour company, which is like a dragphoenin the sky,x soaring high with innovation. We have a saying in Hong Kong, "Add oil," and this is exactly what we do to keep our projects moving forward with great energy. Our product is not only top quality, but also git will bringves you a lgood reputatiof facen in the market.

Text corrected by:
Vince, United States

"Your ideas were clear :) I just made a few small changes to refine the message. "

Honorable Investors, today I want to introduce you to our company, which is like a phoenix soaring high with innovation. We have a saying in Hong Kong, "Add oil," and this is exactly what we do to keep our projects moving forward with great energy. Our product is not only top quality but also gives you a good reputation in the market.

Honorable Investors, today I want to introduce you our company, which is like a dragon in the sky, soaring high with innovation. We have a saying in Hong Kong, "Add oil," and this is exactly what we do to keep our projects moving forward with great energy. Our product is not only top quality, but also it will bring you a lot of face in the market.

Mistake Example #2

Overuse of 'very' to emphasize adjectives

Our company is very excited to present a veryunique opportunity for investment in ourvery innovative tech startup. We have developed averyn advanced platform that is very efficient in connecting users with verypersonalized services. This is a verypromising venture withvery high potential for growth in the verydynamic Hong Kong market.

Text corrected by:
Michele A., Boston, Massachusetts; United States

"I reduced repetition of the word "very." Overall, the ideas in this text are clearly expressed."

Our company is very excited to present a unique opportunity for investment in our innovative tech startup. We have developed an advanced platform that is very efficient in connecting users with personalized services. This is a promising venture with high potential for growth in the dynamic Hong Kong market.

Our company is very excited to present a very unique opportunity for investment in our very innovative tech startup. We have developed a very advanced platform that is very efficient in connecting users with very personalized services. This is a very promising venture with very high potential for growth in the very dynamic Hong Kong market.

Mistake Example #3

Confusion with countable vs. uncountable nouns ('She has much friends')

Dear Investors,oOur company has developed innovative technology that will change many industryies. We have received much feedback from potential partners, and there is great interest in our product. With your support, we can expand our reach and make asignificant impact ionthe market. Thank you for considering our proposal.

Text corrected by:
Jennifer, Detroit, Michigan USA

"Good work! I just made a few small changes, including changes to some of the nouns."

Dear Investors, Our company has developed innovative technology that will change many industries. We have received much feedback from potential partners, and there is great interest in our product. With your support, we can expand our reach and make a significant impact on the market. Thank you for considering our proposal.

Dear Investors, our company has developed innovative technology that will change many industry. We have received much feedback from potential partners, and there is great interest in our product. With your support, we can expand our reach and make significant impact in market. Thank you for considering our proposal.