Common English Mistakes in Script Treatments by Arabic Speakers

This page focuses on errors typically made by native Arabic speakers from United Arab Emirates when writing a Script Treatment in English.

Mistake Example #1

Misuse of articles ('I have car' instead of 'I have a car')

Inthe bustling city of Dubai,a young filmmaker named Ahmed dreams of creating afilm that capturesthe essence of his vibrant hometown. He envisions astory abouta group of friends who embark on an adventure throughthe desert, discovering thehidden secrets ofan ancient civilization. As thesun sets overthe skyline, Ahmed imagines ascene where the protagonist stands atop asand dune, gazing at thehorizon witha sense of wonder and possibility.

Text corrected by:
Jennifer, Detroit, Michigan USA

"Pretty good! I just needed to add some articles."

In the bustling city of Dubai, a young filmmaker named Ahmed dreams of creating a film that captures the essence of his vibrant hometown. He envisions a story about a group of friends who embark on an adventure through the desert, discovering the hidden secrets of an ancient civilization. As the sun sets over the skyline, Ahmed imagines a scene where the protagonist stands atop a sand dune, gazing at the horizon with a sense of wonder and possibility.

In bustling city of Dubai, young filmmaker named Ahmed dreams of creating film that captures essence of his vibrant hometown. He envisions story about group of friends who embark on adventure through desert, discovering hidden secrets of ancient civilization. As sun sets over skyline, Ahmed imagines scene where protagonist stands atop sand dune, gazing at horizon with sense of wonder and possibility.

Mistake Example #2

Overuse of passive voice

In the bustling city of Dubai, a mysterious artifact was discovered by agroup of archaeologistsdiscovered a mysterious artifact. The artifact was believed to hold secrets of an ancient civilization, and ithe wteasm decidedby the team that further investigation was needed. As the sun set over the desert, a plan was devised bythe lead archaeologistdevised a plan to transport the artifact to a secure location, whereit would be studied by expertswould study it.

Text corrected by:
Vince, United States

"Changes I made were mostly to improve fluidity and reduce the use of passive voice. Well done! "

In the bustling city of Dubai, a group of archaeologists discovered a mysterious artifact. The artifact was believed to hold secrets of an ancient civilization, and the team decided that further investigation was needed. As the sun set over the desert, the lead archaeologist devised a plan to transport the artifact to a secure location where experts would study it.

In the bustling city of Dubai, a mysterious artifact was discovered by a group of archaeologists. The artifact was believed to hold secrets of an ancient civilization, and it was decided by the team that further investigation was needed. As the sun set over the desert, a plan was devised by the lead archaeologist to transport the artifact to a secure location, where it would be studied by experts.