Common English Mistakes in Transfer Essays by Italian Speakers

This page focuses on errors typically made by native Italian speakers from Italy when writing a Transfer Essay in English.

Mistake Example #1

Using direct translations from Italian (e.g., 'We see us tomorrow' instead of 'See you tomorrow')

I am writing this essay to explain why I want to transfer to your university. I have always admired the way your courses are structured, and I believe they will help me toreach my goals. InAt my current university, I feel like I am not able to express my full potential, and I hope to find a place where I can grow and learn more. I am excited to potentiallyjoin your community andto contribute with my experiences. We see us soon,I hopeto hear from you soon.

Text corrected by:
Gregg, Los Angeles, CA

"This needed some tweaking to sound more native and natural."

I am writing this essay to explain why I want to transfer to your university. I have always admired the way your courses are structured, and I believe they will help me reach my goals. At my current university, I feel like I am not able to express my full potential, and I hope to find a place where I can grow and learn more. I am excited to potentially join your community and contribute with my experiences. I hope to hear from you soon.

I am writing this essay to explain why I want to transfer to your university. I have always admired the way your courses are structured, and I believe they will help me to reach my goals. In my current university, I feel like I am not able to express my full potential, and I hope to find a place where I can grow and learn more. I am excited to join your community and to contribute with my experiences. We see us soon, I hope.

Mistake Example #2

Confusing singular and plural nouns

I am writing this essay to explain why I want to transfer to your university. The courses offered at your institution are very appealing to me, especially the ones in computer science. My current university does not have the same opportunities and resources that I believe are essential for my academic growth. I am eager to join your community and contribute to the diverse student body with my unique perspective and experience.

Text corrected by:
Vince, United States

"This was already very well-written – I just made a few minor changes to make some singular nouns plural :)"

I am writing this essay to explain why I want to transfer to your university. The courses offered at your institution are very appealing to me, especially the ones in computer science. My current university does not have the same opportunities and resources that I believe are essential for my academic growth. I am eager to join your community and contribute to the diverse student body with my unique perspective and experience.

I am writing this essay to explain why I want to transfer to your university. The course offered at your institution are very appealing to me, especially the one in computer science. My current university does not have the same opportunities and resource that I believe are essential for my academic growth. I am eager to join your community and contribute to the diverse student body with my unique perspective and experience.

Mistake Example #3

Overuse of passive voice

As a studentwho is eager to transfer to your esteemed university, it isI believed that my academic journey will be greatly enhanced by the diverse opportunities the schooloffereds. The coursesthat are provided by your institution aprovideseen aslign perfectlyaligned with my career goals, and athe vibrant campus life wis expected toll enrich my personal growth. It is hoped that my application will be considered favorably, and I am granted a chance to contribute to your communitywill be granted.

Text corrected by:
Gregg, Los Angeles, CA

"This needed some tweaking to reduce the use of passive voice."

As a student eager to transfer to your esteemed university, I believe that my academic journey will be greatly enhanced by the diverse opportunities the school offers. The courses your institution provides align perfectly with my career goals, and the vibrant campus life will enrich my personal growth. I hope my application will be considered favorably and I am granted a chance to contribute to your community.

As a student who is eager to transfer to your esteemed university, it is believed that my academic journey will be greatly enhanced by the diverse opportunities offered. The courses that are provided by your institution are seen as perfectly aligned with my career goals, and a vibrant campus life is expected to enrich my personal growth. It is hoped that my application will be considered favorably, and a chance to contribute to your community will be granted.